दोलखाका मतदाता भन्छन्- ‘चुनावका दिन कुटामारी गर्छन्, हातैबाट भोट खोस्छन्’. 

Detected Manipulations & Suggested Changes

Unsubstantiated claims

Presenting serious allegations without corroborating evidence, data, or response from the accused side.

Quotes such as: - "ढुंगामुढा गरेर कुटामारी खेल्छन्, हाम्रो हातको मत खोसेर लैजान्छन्, आफुले हाल्नै नपाउने भोट खसाल्न किन जाने ?" - "चुनाव आयो की कुटामारी ढुंगामुढा हुन्छ... तिघ्रेमुङ्घ्रेले हातैबाट भोट खास्छन्, उनीहरुले नै हाल्दिन्छन् ।" These are strong allegations of systematic violence and vote snatching, but the article does not provide: - Any verification (e.g., past incident reports, police records, election commission statements) - Identification of who exactly "तिघ्रेमुङ्घ्रे" or the perpetrators are (party cadres, local leaders, etc.) - Any attempt to contact or quote the accused side or relevant authorities.

3 suggestions

Add corroborating information such as past incident reports, data from the Election Commission, human rights organizations, or police records about violence or irregularities in the area.

Clarify who is being accused (e.g., party cadres of specific parties, local power brokers) and seek their comment or response to the allegations.

Explicitly frame these statements as allegations or personal experiences (e.g., "स्थानीयका दाबी अनुसार", "उनको भनाइमा") and note that they could not be independently verified if that is the case.

Appeal to emotion

Using vivid, emotionally charged descriptions that can strongly influence readers’ feelings without proportional factual context.

Phrases like: - "चुनावमा भोट खसाल्न जान पनि थुरथुर काम्नुपर्छ" - "हामी बुढाबुढी, महलिा, केटाकेटी पिल्सन्छौं, भाग्न सक्दैनौं" These descriptions emphasize fear and victimization in a vivid way, which is important as testimony but is not balanced with factual context (e.g., frequency, scale, comparison with other areas, or official measures for security).

3 suggestions

Retain the human stories but complement them with factual context: how often such incidents have been recorded, whether security has been increased, and what official data say.

Explicitly distinguish between emotional perception and verified pattern (e.g., "स्थानीयलाई यस्तो अनुभूति छ कि..." vs. "प्रत्येक चुनावमा यस्तै हुन्छ" stated as fact).

Include information on any measures taken by authorities to address such fears, to avoid leaving only an emotionally one-sided picture.

Oversimplification

Presenting a complex situation as if it were uniform and universal, without nuance or exceptions.

Statements like: - "हरेक निर्वाचनमा भोट हाल्न एक घण्टा पैदल हिँडेर मतदानस्थल पुगे पनि झै–झगडा र झडपले गर्दा उनको मत खोसिएका कारण..." - "चुनाव आयो की कुटामारी ढुंगामुढा हुन्छ" These lines suggest that in every election and every time there is voting, violence and vote snatching occur, without clarifying whether this is literally every election, every booth, or based on some specific incidents.

3 suggestions

Qualify the scope: specify whether these are repeated but not necessarily universal incidents (e.g., "धेरैपटक", "अघिल्ला केही चुनावमा", "स्थानीयका अनुसार प्रायः चुनावमा...").

Provide any available counterexamples or nuance (e.g., if there were relatively peaceful elections, or if some polling centers were secure).

Clarify whether these are personal experiences of a few individuals or widely reported by many residents, possibly by indicating how many people were interviewed or whether this reflects a broader community sentiment.

Unbalanced reporting

Presenting only one side’s perspective without including or attempting to include other relevant sides.

The article only includes voices of local Tamang voters expressing fear and frustration. There is no: - Comment from election officials about security arrangements. - Response from political parties or local leaders who might be implicated in the alleged violence. - Independent expert or observer perspective (e.g., election observers, rights groups).

3 suggestions

Include a response or at least an attempted response from the Election Commission, local administration, or security agencies about the allegations and what they are doing to ensure safe voting.

Seek and include comments from representatives of major political parties active in the area, especially if they are implicitly or explicitly blamed.

If such responses are not available, explicitly state that attempts were made to contact them and they did not respond, to show effort toward balance.

Cherry-picking data / testimonies

Selecting only testimonies that support a particular narrative without indicating whether they are representative.

The article quotes two individuals (Sommai Tamang and Bathur Tamang) and then generalizes to the whole settlement and elections in the area. There is no indication of whether other residents have different experiences or whether some feel safe or intend to vote enthusiastically.

3 suggestions

Interview and quote a broader range of residents, including those who may have different views (e.g., people who still plan to vote, those who feel security has improved, or those who have not experienced such violence).

Explicitly state the limited scope of the testimonies (e.g., "केही स्थानीयका भनाइमा" rather than implying the entire community shares the exact same experience).

If the majority of interviewed residents share similar concerns, mention the number or proportion (e.g., "हाम्रो कुराकानीमा भेटिएका अधिकांश मतदाताले यस्तै गुनासो गरे").