Why I emerged only Nigerian among 100 scientists honoured by UNESCO — US-based scientist. 

Detected Manipulations & Suggested Changes

Appeal to emotion / Narrative framing

Using emotionally charged or destiny-like language to frame events as special or divinely guided, which can subtly influence readers’ perceptions beyond the factual content.

The passage: "Coincidentally, the year I arrived was the same year the Cleveland Clinic was ranked the best hospital in the world. That was also when they acquired a quantum computer fully dedicated to healthcare. It felt divinely orchestrated; being at Cleveland State University gave me access to a quantum computer even before formally starting my PhD." The first two sentences are factual/chronological. The phrase "It felt divinely orchestrated" introduces a narrative of destiny or divine arrangement. While clearly presented as her feeling ("felt"), it adds an emotional, quasi-mystical framing that can make the sequence of events seem more extraordinary than necessary for an objective account.

2 suggestions

Clarify that this is a personal interpretation and separate it more clearly from the factual sequence, for example: "Coincidentally, the year I arrived was the same year the Cleveland Clinic was ranked the best hospital in the world and acquired a quantum computer fully dedicated to healthcare. From my perspective, this timing was remarkable, as being at Cleveland State University gave me access to a quantum computer even before formally starting my PhD."

Remove the religious/destiny framing entirely if aiming for strictly neutral tone: "Coincidentally, the year I arrived was the same year the Cleveland Clinic was ranked the best hospital in the world and acquired a quantum computer fully dedicated to healthcare. Being at Cleveland State University gave me access to a quantum computer even before formally starting my PhD."

Narrative fallacy

Connecting events into a coherent story of purpose or inevitability, which can overstate causality or significance compared to a more neutral chronological description.

The overall arc of the interview presents her journey as a series of turning points: the strike leading to her brother’s teaching, the discovery of quantum computing, and the timing of the Cleveland Clinic’s quantum computer. Phrases like "That was the turning point for me" and the description of events as "divinely orchestrated" help build a compelling story. While this is common and acceptable in personal narratives, it can subtly imply that these events were uniquely fated or causally linked beyond what is evidenced. Examples: - "During that period, the way he taught me science changed everything. ... That was the turning point for me." - "It felt divinely orchestrated; being at Cleveland State University gave me access to a quantum computer even before formally starting my PhD."

3 suggestions

Rephrase to emphasize that these are her retrospective interpretations rather than objective causal laws, e.g.: "Looking back, that period significantly influenced my interest in science" instead of "changed everything" and "turning point".

Where possible, add modest qualifiers: "This experience played a major role in my decision" instead of absolute formulations like "changed everything."

If aiming for a more strictly objective style, reduce the number of strong causal/narrative connectors ("turning point", "changed everything") and stick to describing what happened and what decisions followed, without implying inevitability.